I can’t see
what you see in me
another’s arms holding you
the two of us drowsy in a hotel
where we go from this point
and definitely absolutely not
hot tears in your eyes
and that is why
I can’t see
you
any
more.
Thanks to Kiersty Boon and her brilliant sequence of Valentines for inspiring me to try something different. I guess on some levels it’s still a Nature poem, though…
Gonecycling (again) 
Wow…your writing skills continue to amaze me.
Thank you, Charles – it was a bit of a leap of faith to post this one, because I wasn’t really sure where it came from. One of those pieces that just had to be written, I guess. I really appreciate the vote of confidence. Thank you.
Oh, that’s lovely.
The romantic in me is delighted 🙂
David
Thank you for your generous words, David – the romantic in me is still reeling from the shock of being allowed out to play for once, while the aspiring writer in me is delighted that you like it! Have a great day, my friend.
The two seperated and then joining into one, alone. Very clever. I love these shaped poems and I’ve never been able to do one. Love, love, love… is it really all we need? Thank you so much for your support on my own valentine series. To be honest, it’s been a labour of love (groan) but I’m nearly there.
What a lovely and generous reponse; thank you. I owe it all to you, really – reading your Valentines made me want to step outside my usual ‘observational’ oeuvre and try reaching for something a bit deeper. Really glad you think it works.
Shaped poems like this usually are more work to read, and thus overbear the words. This one shapes the words’ sentiment nicely, though. Tying the absence of tears to absence was a nice trope.
Thanks, Brendan – as I said in response to Charles’ comment, this poem was a real leap of faith for me, both in terms of its structure and its material. Really good to have another positive reaction; I might even try writing another one about about love one day…many thanks for your comment, it’s much appreciated.